批改网作文批改 第一篇

标黑的是系统判定的闪光短语和精彩句型，但我里面用到的高级短语和句型不止标黑的（我要我觉得，臭不要脸，只有第一篇用斜黑体标了一下后面太懒了）。

我都是学习几个固定的短语句型，然后形成比较固定的模板，写作文就往模板里套。都是三段式qwq~

这是我在系统提交过的作文，可以借鉴模板但不要复制粘贴，会被查重判定抄袭。

It is universally acknowledged that hospice care is a special kind of care that gives priority the quality of life for people and their caregivers who are experiencing an advanced, life-limiting illness. In recent years, hospice care enjoys widespread popularity among citizens in that it provides compassionate care for people in the last phase of incurable disease so that they may live as fully and comfortably as possible. Some people prefer palliative care while others make a choice of hospice care. When asked my view about it（一个简单的状语从句省略中出现过去分词，用于引出自己的想法非常好用）, I would take hospice care into consideration.

First and foremost, it is generally acknowledged that hospice care treats the person and symptoms of the disease, rather than treating the disease itself. Palliative care, nevertheless, usually is a part of hospice care. The main goal of including palliative care into hospice services attaches importance to assist patients to be comfortable while allowing them to enjoy the last stage of life. What\'s more, the reason why I recommend hospice care is it contributes to the patients, therefore, their last days which may be spent with dignity and quality, surrounded by their loved ones. What hospice care brings is a quality life, making the best of each day during the last stages of advanced illness. Not only can hospice care cope with physical issues, but also it can focus on mental, emotional, social, and spiritual issues that may come up.

Just as the saying goes, you matter because of who you are, and you matter to the moment of your life. There is no denying that hospice care will arouse more public attention with the economic and social development progress.

Research ethics is characterized as guidelines and norms followed when conducting academic research. In recent years, research ethics have attracted an increasing number of attention from academia and society. When asked my view about it, I suppose research ethics plays an essential role in scientific research.

First and foremost, it is generally acknowledged that research ethics is the most basic requirement of any academic. Therefore, academic misconduct cannot be accepted and tolerated by a large number of scientific researchers. A case in point is He Haibo, an associate professor of Zhejiang University, was sacked and fired for plagiarism, and his tutor who enjoyed a good reputation in the field of medicine, was involved in the scandal. What\'s more, maintaining research ethics not only is of great importance to scientific research activities, but also is very beneficial to promote a truth-seeking social atmosphere as well as improving the moral level of the society.

Due to the necessity of research ethics, it is conceivable that a variety of effective measures must be taken as to purify the scientific research environment. Research ethics should be taken as the foundation in the personality training to attach great importance to the consistency of quality, action and research. Furthermore, there is no denying that establishing the inner and out supervision system will contribute to coping with misconduct.

As is vividly depicted in the cartoon above, the delivery is forbidden to enter the campus while the student is anxiously waiting for his takeaway. The entire picture reveals the sharp reality whether takeaway should be forbidden to enter the campus.

With the popularity of the mobile Internet, takeaway enjoys widespread popularity in that it is convenient, fast and affordable. What\'s more, the taste and service quality of takeaway are better than the food made by the canteen; therefore, an increasing number of students develop a preference for ordering takeaway. Eventually, saving time for students who are occupied with learning makes takeaway more alternative.

In contrast, there are three hidden drawbacks in the takeaway, making school rules prohibit delivering takeaway. First and foremost, there are food safety hazards in takeaway. In the second place, ordering takeaway frequently is not beneficial to forming a wholesome diet and diligent habit. Ultimately, delivering takeaway leads to the chaotic disorder on campus.

As far as I am concerned, the school is supposed to strengthen guidance rather than ban the delivery from delivering takeaways. The school should attach great importance to improve the quality of canteen dining. Strengthen the management of the sale and control the hidden dangers of health and safety should also be taken into account. Only in this way can students have more alternatives.

下面三篇作文里好像还有些错，但是我很懒当时就没改,现在也很懒……

可以略过不看，发现错误可以提醒我哈哈哈

但是也可以学一下里面分号的用法。

Part time jobs enjoy widespread popularity among the group of college students nowadays. Different individuals hold a wide range of views. When asked my opinion, I support college students to participate in part time jobs in that it has the following three merits.

First and foremost, doing part time jobs offers you an opportunity to make an attempt to contact the society, improving your practical ability and expanding your horizons. What\'s more, doing part time jobs is of great benefit to your development since you can make sense of rewarding knowledge. Last but not least, no one could have failed to notice the fact that you can earn a large amount of pocket money in your spare time provided that you are diligent enough.

In conclusion, an increasing number of college students develop a preference for doing part time jobs owing to it contributes a lot to our development; therefore, college students are supposed to do part time jobs. Only in this way can we have a more appealing life.

How are things going with you?

As you know, I joined an online language course a few months ago. I\'m writing to recommend the course and give you some advice on how to improve language ability effectively.

In our class, the teachers systematically explain language knowledge, which is the most vital cause why I recommend you to participate in our course. Varying from the traditional class, our class atmosphere is truly relaxing and appealing; therefore, both teachers and classmates can be close friends who can do you a favor. Besides, we are asked to speak in English regardless of the class time or spare time, which can multiply the opportunity of getting in touch with English.

On your way to learning language, I\'d like to share my advice with you. Firstly, doing a large number of exercises is of great benefit to your learning. What\'s more, you can turn to the website where you can find plenty of information related to how to learn English well. Eventually, you can go to the English corner to communicate with others.

Looking forward to your early reply.

I\'m lacking in words to describe how regretful I am when I write this email to you. I have participated in your online language course since a few months. I\'m writing to tell you I can\'t go on your course and I\'ll say what I think about it.

The basic reason why I choose to quit is that I am too busy to have time to accomplish it. Your course is of great benefit to my advancement in English language, however, my spare time is occupied by a growing number of professional classes. To make things worse, I require going out for an internship this year. In consequence, it\'s a pity that I won\'t continue.

Overall, your course is fairly satisfactory, since the teachers interpret systematically and class atmosphere is truly appealing. Particularly, another advantage of the course is that it guides me to use English as much as I can in daily life. Whereas, I consider this course still exist some insignificance. As an illustration, with regard to fragmented learning gains its popularity in the youth group, I think you may as well attach importance to this field. In this case, although I don\'t have plenty of time, I can still acquire a little English language every day with piecemeal time.

So apologetic am I. And it\'s highly desirable for you to understand me.

批改网作文批改 第二篇

最后就只好出卖自己了……

还有一处改不出来了，我累了，就这样吧，聪明的孩子你们可以告诉我吗QAQ

因为这次风暴潮灾害反复出现，所以内容相关度很高~

原文：

Storm surge is a phenomenon of abnormal increase of sea surface caused by strong atmospheric disturbance which usually includes tropical storms, extratropical cyclone, cold waves or cold air. Storm surges disaster usually refers to the disaster caused by the storm water increase anomaly and its influence factors coupled with the high tide level, with the result that leads to casualties and property losses.

It is universally acknowledged that storm surge disasters occur frequently in China. When it comes to the measures to cope with storm surge disaster, it can be carried out from the following aspects. To begin with, the National Forecast Center should make efforts to form a complete observation and prediction network of storm surge disasters, to improve the ability of storm surges disaster early warning and perfect the storm surges disaster emergency plan system and the response mechanism. What\'s more, it pays to build coastal protection projects, raise seawalls and other defense standards in key protected areas, and build sustainable ecological defense measures such as biological revetment engineering. Last but not least, we will strengthen Marine and coastal ecological protection mechanisms and enhance the climate resilience of Marine and coastal ecosystems.

Under the background of global warming, the frequency, intensity and occurrence time span of storm surge disaster in coastal areas of China has increased to a certain extent. It\'s highly desirable for government and research institutions to make joint efforts in order to work out storm surges disaster.

批改网作文批改 第三篇

例1：我是如何通过修改一个单词将作文的分数从分提高到91分的？

刚刚我写了一篇有关慕课（MOOCs）的作文，修改完毕只有分，我以为90+无望了，但是抱着试一试的心态，把最后一句“Not only can it……, but also it can ……”中的第一个it替换成了关键词MOOCs，一下子就多了分！

可以看到内容相关确实涨了一大块。

与主题有关的关键词一定要在文中反复出现，这样系统就会判定内容相关度高，而其他的词语为了变化增加可读性可以进行同义替换。

比如在第一段中，表达观点我就用了三种不同的表达方式，所以不要再呆呆地用I think/ recognize了~

持某观点：claim = contend/ deem/ assert/ share the belief that/ hold the view that

支持某观点： advocate = maitain/ vote for/ side with/ be in favor of

反对某观点： contradict = criticize/ be against/ cast doubts on

It is universally acknowledged that MOOCs enjoys widespread popularity among students in recent years in that it is convenient and efficient. Some individuals share the belief that MOOCs, as a burgeoning means of learning, will replace offline teaching in campus, while others side with MOOCs are just a fad which will fade away as time goes on. When asked my opinion about it, I\'m not identify with the two views above and hold the view that MOOCs and offline teaching will not disappear or out of date.

First and foremost, the reason why an increasing number of students develop a preference for MOOCs is that it\'s time-saving and convenient, making course get rid of the limitation of time and space. What\'s more, another advantage of MOOCs is that we can access a wide range of knowledge, which contributes to expanding our horizons and enriching our experience. Whereas, there is no doubt that MOOCs is suffering from the disadvantages that teachers from students are devoid of face-to-face communication with each other in comparison with traditional offline teaching. On the one hand, the feedback received by teachers from students is not timely and sufficient. On the other hand, some students with poor self-control may relax due to the lack of supervision of a digital campus.

In a nutshell, MOOCs will promote the integrated development of online and offline education. Not only can MOOCs improve teacher\'s work efficiency, but also it can satisfy the a variety of needs of students.

另外，篇章结构是与文中用的连词、转折词有关的。

比如：

first and foremost, to begin with, to start with (第一）

what\'s more, in addition （第二）

last but not least, eventually （最后）

In a nutshell, to sum up, in conclusion/ summary （总结）

however (but可以用however替代，但but用在一句话内，however是另起一句话再用，另外，however用在句首不是很地道，可以主语+，+however+，+剩下的句子）

while （表示转折和两者对比时很好用，比如一部分人认为……，while另一部分人认为……）

whereas （然而）

例2：通过最后一段的关键词复现将作文的分数从分提高到分。

依旧是内容相关。

批改网作文批改 第四篇

enjoy widespread popularity 受欢迎

enjoy a good reputation 有名

a wide range of 各种各样的

develop a preference for 喜欢

No one could have failed to notice the fact that……没有人不会注意到……这一事实

multiply the chance of 增加……的机会

There is no denying that 这是不可否认的

attach great importance to 认为……重要

give me a kind consideration 给我一个机会

on my way to…… 我在干……

be of great benefit to / be very beneficial to 有利于

contribute a lot to 大大地促成了

to begin with / to start with 第一

in addition / what\'s more 第二

last but not least 最后

单词/短语升级

and = along with

but = however

very = extremely

consider = take into consideration/ account

finally = eventually

hard-working = diligent

help = assist

should = be supposed to

understand = figure out/ make sense of

shortcoming= drawback

be busy with = be occupied with

important = vital

improssible = out of the question

interesting = absorbing/ stricking/ appealing

join = participate

meaningful = rewarding

be different from = differ/ vary from

be eager to do = be dying/long to

hard = challenging

adj = be of +抽象n: important = be of (great) importance

disappointed = depressed/ frustrated / be cast down

ignore = neglect /take no notice of /overlook /pass by

didn\'t take part in /attend = be absent from/ absence from

more and more +adj/adv = increasingly +adj/adv

more and more +n = an increasing number of/ a growing number of

all kinds /sorts of = a wide range of / a variety of

be famous/ be well known = acknowledeg oneself = enjoy/earn a good reputation

be popular with = appeal to / be attached to / enjoy widespread popularity

最后，高级语法总结为（我英语老师总结的）：

肯定不如否定好，主动不如被动巧。

定语从句用得妙，倒装分词不可少。

两个好用的倒装句：

Only in this way/ Only by this means can we ……

Not only can you……, but also you can……

比较简单的分词用法：现在分词作结果状语，状语从句省略中出现过去分词，过去分词作后置定语。

批改网作文批改 第五篇

今天，我们上了一节作文讲评会，我们上了两个半小时左右的课，终于上完了这一节课。

这时我看见有一位同学说自己父亲的文章是写父亲的，那我也是一样。我的父亲的文章是写父亲去哪儿了，他的父亲去哪儿了，他的父亲去哪儿了，父亲去哪儿了，他的父亲到哪儿了，他在哪儿呢?

这时我听见有人对我们说：“你们父女俩的文章都是写父亲的文章，我也是写父亲的啊!他怎么会把自己的文章写得这么好?”

这时我看到有一位同学说：“父亲怎么会把自己的文章写得这么好?他怎么会把父亲的文章写得这么好?”这是他自己的父亲的文章吗?他怎么会把父亲的文章写得这么好?他的父亲到底是怎么把他的文章写好的?他的文章怎么写得这么好?”

这是我听到了这个同学的父亲的文章，他的父亲是在嘲笑他，因为他父亲是写父亲，他也是在夸奖他的文章，这是他自己对父亲的嘲笑啊!这时我听到有人在说：“你们父子俩都是写这篇作文的，你们父女俩都是写自己父母的啊!”

这时我听见同学们都在说：“你们父女俩的文章都写得这么好!”这时我听见有人在说：“你们父女俩的文章都是写自己的父亲，你们父子俩的文章都是写父亲的，你们父女俩的文章都是写自己的父亲的，你们父女俩都是写自己的父亲啊!”

通过这次作文讲评会，我看到这位同学写得好，这位同学的父亲也看到了，这位同学的父亲是写父亲的，父亲看到这位同学的文章也是看到了，他的父亲也是看到了，父亲看到这位同学的文章也是看到了，他的父亲看到这位同学的文章也是看到了，这位同学的父亲也看到了，我们父子俩的文章都是父亲的。

我们家有一只小狗，名叫“花花”，它有一身黑白相间的毛，像一团棉花团似的。眼睛又黑又亮，像两个玻璃球一样，炯

批改网作文批改 第六篇

在一个风和日丽的星期天，小明在写作业。

小红看见了，连忙跑过来说：“小明，我的作业本掉了，是谁把它捡起来的？”小明听见了，连忙跑过来对小明说：“小明，是我的错呀！”小明听了，连忙把自己的作业本和笔还了给了小红。小明说：“谢谢小明。”小红说：“不用谢。”

过了好一会儿，小明才从写字桌上拿起来作业。小明把作业本递给了小明，小红看了看，说：“这是谁的作业？”小明回答说：“是我的。”小红说：“那你拿起来做。”

小明把自己的作业本递给了小红。说：“你的作业本是我的。”小红说：“不是我的。”小明说：“不是你的。”小明又说：“那你拿起来做。”小红拿着作业本说：“不是我的。”小明又把自己的作业本递给了小红。小红说：“是我的。”小明说：“不是我的。”说完，他们俩都把自己的作业本拿回了家。

小明说：“小明你真懂事！”他们俩都笑了。

批改网作文批改 第七篇

上课啦！老师说：“上个星期四的作文课上我们来一次小组评语。”同学们一个个摩拳擦掌，跃跃欲试。有的人眉开眼笑，还有的同学在小声议论，老师看见了，就说：“你们都很聪明呀。”有的人却眉头紧皱，不知道要说什么，有的人却在不停地说：“老师，您看，我这一句的话语，老师看了以后，就说：“我这一句的话，你们都听不进去。”有的人甚至在心里暗暗地想：“我说错的话，老师也会生气。”有的人甚至在自己的心里想：“我说错的话，老师也会生气。”老师听见了，就说：“你们说错了吧？”有的人说：“这一句的话是对的。”老师听见了，就说：“你们这个小组的人说错的话，老师听了以后，就批评你们。”

听了老师的话，我心里就像喝了蜜一样，甜滋滋的。我想：下学期我一定要改掉粗心的毛病。